In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Most people agree that the use of cars in future1 could be different than it is now. In my opinion, the number of personal cars will considerably decrease in twenty years2. I fell3 this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.First of all, everyone knows that the cost of nonrenewable4 fuels such as gas and petrol grows every year. So, in two decades the price might be so high that it will be unprofitable5 to have a personal car. If it happens people may prefer more convenient and ecological friendly6 ways to move around the city such as public transport and bicycles rather than expensive and nature polluting7 cars. For example, in Netherlands8 the fuel prices are extremely high and the government taxes for having a car are quite large9, therefore the bigger part of people changed their vehicle to a bicycle. To my mind, same situation will occur in every developed country in the world. This example demonstrates one of the reasons of10 car number decline.
Secondly, nobody is sure how the work industry may develop in the future. I believe that people will not go to their work at all. People twenty years from now would11 be able to work and study at home because outsourcing is progressing faster and faster nowadays. Also, robots could replace people in the service industry and manufacturing. Consequently, people would not even need a car as they would not use it every day. For instance, most of my friends whose main job is a working-from-home freelancer do not have their own cars12, they usually use public transport. This cause could seriously reduce the spread of cars13.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that the total amount of car14 in the world would decline in twenty years. This is because of the high fuel prices and the increasing quality of public transport, and because most people would not need a personal car in the future.
Нумерация ошибок соответствует маркировке в тексте. Рекомендуемые исправления и изменения в тексте подчёркнуты.
- In the future — с фразами the future, the past, the present мы всегда используем определённый артикль.
- … the number of personal cars will decrease considerably — глагол, затем наречие. В остальных случаях это как правило означает использование инверсии.
- Fell — прошедшая форма глагола to fall, очевидно нам нужно слово felt (прошедшая форма to feel).
- Non-renewable — так называемый compound adjective (прилагательное из двух и более слов) рекомендуется писать через дефис.
- … it will be economically unjustified/wasteful to have a personal car — слово profit подразумевает прежде всего какую-то выгоду, выраженную в деньгах, нежели экономию.
- … ecologically friendly — наречие + прилагательное, где первый элемент изменяет второй.
- Требуется перефразирование. Например enviromentally unfriendly cars.
- The Netherlands — одна из стран, которая требует определённого артикля.
- Taxes… are quite high — налоги будут скорее высокими, нежели большими.
- … reasons for — неверный предлог.
- Would — могли бы, то есть подразумевается, что «могли бы, но не будут, либо это крайне маловероятно». Для прогнозов логичнее использовать will (предположения, не имеющие под собой какого-то подкрепления) или going to (когда у нас есть основания так полагать).
- … do not own cars. — стилистическая рекомендация, нежели ошибка. По возможности выражайте мысли ёмкими фразами без «воды».
- Слово cars в тексте использовано пять раз. Следует разнообразить повествование синонимами, например: personal vehicles, private transport.
- Разумеется речь о cars во множественном числе.