IELTS Writing Task 2 — Practical skills

We live in a drastically developing society. For the last 60 years it has been transformed a lot in every sphere of life. Cars are not a luxury item anymore, being eco-friendly is a trend nowadays and our theoretical knowledge is valued less than a₁ practical experience. We can support or be against this idea but we can not deny the fact it has both benefits and drawbacks.

As for the advantages₂, we can mention that modern people usually have a job to get as much working experience₃ as it is possible. This helps them to become more efficient and valuable workers for their future employers or customers. This tendency also helps to solve another problem. Now there is not any lack of workers which is fantastic for companies and businesses as they have₄ a great number of options to choose from and for employees as they are always in need of improving their skills to win the competition. Another positive effect of this phenomenon is that people became₅ more independent and self-confident because they always need to find solutions for real, not hypothetical issues and their previous experience is a nice helper for it.

As for the disadvantages, it is obvious that junior specialists often struggle with trivial tasks. This happens becauese they do not know the basics because they do not pay₆ any attention to the theory of their specialities. In addition, professions such as doctors, lawyers or teachers lost₅ their prestige and became undervalued. The young have no interest to them because they need to study for too long to become good specialists in these fields. They prefer some easier ways.

In conclusion, I would like to say that I like this trend. However, we need to implement changes to professions that do not follow it to make them adopted to new reality.

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1. Тут мы говорил о практическом опыте как о вещи вцелом, так что артикль не нужен
2. Таких зеркальных конструкций лучше избегать — не стоит пренебрегать возможностью показать знание различных вводных оборотов.
3. … usually have have a
4. Now, there is no lack/shortage of workers, which is fantastic for companies and businesses, as they … — отделяем вводное слово запятой; ‘there is not any lack’ звучит довольно неуклюже, предлагаю заменить; which отделяем запятыми — это так называемый non-restrictive clause. Определить его очень просто — если фрагмент после which можно выпустить из текста без потери смысла — то нужно отделять его запятыми (когда он вводится через which).
5. Present Perfect будет здесь уместнее.
6. … because they are unfamiliar with the basics and pay no/little attention to the theory — стараемся не повторять одну конструкцию; также важно показать знание альтернативных методов фраз с отрицанием.

Артикли — это то, на что экзаменаторы смотрят очень внимательно. Даже незначительные неточности в их использовании могут здорово испортить оценку. Как и в большинстве других работ, качество этой становится значительно выше, если текст подвергнуть вычитке и убрать повторяющиеся либо слишком простые конструкции.