IELTS Writing Task 2 — Cost of Healthcare #1

Lifestyle₁ is an important part of everyone’s life₁, as it has a major impact on well-being. Daily habits and food can both help people maintain their health and make it worse. Can we talk about an increase in the price of medicine for people who neglect their health?₂ This is a very controversial issue, but I think₃ it is wrong.

On the one hand, most often diseases are caused by such bad habits as smoking or drinking alcohol, the role of fast food is also great. People buy all this with their own money, which probably speaks of their ability to pay for their treatment. However, from life experience, we can all see that all this can be applied to people with a low standard of living, for whom the increase in prices in the field of medical services can be fatal.

I believe that raising the price of anything cannot be a solution to the problem at all. This proposal implies that people will try to save money and, thanks to this, will live healthier. But there is a high probability that people will continue to live as before, but many will simply no longer be able to afford to see a doctor, which will lead to the₄ bad consequences.

In conclusion, I would like to say that improving people’s lives should not be associated with coercion or limitation of something but come from motivation and knowledge about the possible impact on well-being of unhealthy lifestyle and poor diets.

1. Рекомендуется избегать повторений однокоренных слов в одном предложении.
2. Избегайте риторических вопросов в письменной части. Это также касается люботй т.н. informal punctuation — многоточия и восклицательного знака.
3. Используйте фразы типа «I believe», «I hold it that», «I am of the opinion that» вместо более простого «I think»
4. О каким именно плохих последствиях идёт речь? Из текста мы не может этого понять, так что артикль в данном случае можно опустить.